The Other Side

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"Now I'm stuck in the maze of your imagination." Perfect line. Great song, well done. The way your word things pulls the reader into it and lets them feel how you are feeling. Good job. I look forward to reading more of your stuff =)

The song isn't complete but still thanx.

Very nice. But I want to suggest something because I'm just a tiny bit confused. Most of the lyrics seem to say that the person was helpful:

i hadn't seen the other side
but you showed me

You pulled me out
and cleared my mind
you saved me from mass confusion

im lost but not insecure
all because of you

That all sounds like a "good" thing. But then the very last thought is ...

but my life never seemed clear
all because of you

And that turns it all around, makes it really negative. But if you add one word it changes the meaning a lot:

but my life never seemed so clear
all because of you

So the question (in my mind) is, how do you want the song to end?

oops i didnt type so. thanx for pointing it out and if u have any lyrics i could add to it please tell cuz im kinda stuck.

Do not say you suck, dear. It takes practice to reach where you want to be. I know of some people who say they 'sucked' (not pertaining to this exactly), and eventually they gave up on what they did.
Just ask yourself is what you are writing exactly what you want to say or does it need to be changed. If you can think of no other way at present, leave it for a later time. It may come to you then. If not then, perhaps the next piece you write will do the trick, yes?
For what is written, I liked your structure and the lyrics. I look forward to reading the complete product. Take care.

Ditto on all that Nanashi said, and I didn't say specifically before that I love the simplicity of this, because it's not necessarily easy to say something important in a few words. I do hope you'll be able to finish this, and maybe it will only take a few more well-placed words.

I think ur right, im gonna leave it for while and write something else. Thanx for the advice.

finished.

Absolutely perfect. It did not take you too long, did it? It all fits together so well, and the message comes across visually and lyrically. I love it.