Change ( just a little poem )

To entertain
To sustain
This lust
is a must

On the brightest star
Shining so oh so far
I see change
of inormus range
of life changing proportion
of faded distortion

Something you cant obtain
Something you cant gain
It is something you must earn
Something you must learn

The longest journey
The longest story
Of getting there
Of wisdom to share

Never will you get it
If you want it
If you dont earn it
if you dont learn it

Criticism and everything welcome , I´m new to creative writing so i want to know where could i improve myself and what are my flaws .

thank you all in Advance .

It's got some promise, I like the opening. Biggest thing I can offer is that there are several points of repetition and predictability. Practice, practice, practice (and be patient) because you have to exercise your creative self, just like exercising everything else. Also don't forget the structure, how does the tune flow from verse to chorus (if there is one), and which is which.

I´ve read your work , which were great . I havent been writing a long time , but i´ve noticed that I´m getting better . My vocablury is increasing , and i try to incorporate more word play in , And English aint my first language

Well it's hard to tell that English is not native to you, because if you read a lot of mainstream lyrics they're not any better than what you wrote here. So keep it up, stay with it and you'll do fine

And if you ever need any help in translating a thought from your native language to English, I've done that before for others, so just send me a PM or something and I'll be glad to help.

somewhy i find that i can be more creative in english , like i know more words in english , my first language is estonian by the way , it´s a very beatiful language