just looking for some feedback. good, bad, both. pointers on where i can improve, etc. to those who wish to troll, letting you know now i ain't trippin on you now on to the lyrics

Jump start my emotion my lyrics flowin man i’m goin in
Merciless verbage murdering these verman to my hearts contempt
A hunger for women, passion for riches
in this life i’m only wishin for repentance for my ways and my decisions
that’s true religion
an adolescent but my mind sets old
i’m writing chapters of my life so let the truth be told
bloody murder’s what they murmered when i entered the game
resurrecting verbal talent, f**k the gimmicks and fame
cursed with my thoughts inside this trifle life (pause)
a demon in the darkness d*mned to lurking through the night
show me the light, walking through this life hopin for an end to these days
praying for God to furnish my escape and take me today

that's about it really for right now. i've been stuck on the last for bars now for about a week (but have been able to crank out almost 3 more full songs since). what do you guys think? is it concise? if you would like to know my rhyming style, throw on tupac- heartz of men.