Disappear

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"DISAPPEAR"

"Staring above I see,
A tower cloaked in shadows,
Where lightning strikes deep,
I lie, On blood soaked arrows.

The memories rushing at light-speed,
My whole life plays it's playback,
Pushing aside all that I ever loved,
Even in death, I only want you back.

Wish I could atone my sins, and call it a sacrifice,
But that would just end my despair,
So I lay beneath the pouring sky, and slowly move towards you,
Wish I could, along with your smile, disappear."

Thanks

Very nice.

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