All I Need is Time - Songwriters I would love your input or criticism!

All I Need is Time - Lyrics and music Copyright to Conner Joyce
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Verse 1
The Clock ticks but theres no sense
In a world spinnin' on its axis
Its me against the universe tonight

All the stars that paint the sky
Couldn't give me peace of mind
The beauty of the world is passin' by

PC
Broken seams leak my dreams into and endless sky

Chorus
You know its hard to hide
Just what it is inside
That makes me want to throw this all away
I really thought I knew
Just what I had to do
I would have given up the world for you to stay

V2
Grey skies September's reign
Keeps us damp, dark and tame
They fall to keep the color in our souls

The Cold comes the lucky ones
They hold hands and children run
Winters awful hard to brunt alone

PC
Broken seams leak my dreams into an endless sky

Ch
You know its hard to hide
Just what it is inside
That makes me want to throw this all away
I really thought I knew
Just what I had to do
I would have given up the world for you to stay

Bridge
The Shell barely holds this weight
These banks are meant to break
I'm severed, and whose to pick up the pieces?

Ch
You know its hard to hide
Just what it is inside
That makes me want to throw this all away
I really thought I knew
Just what I had to do
I would have given up the world for you to stay
Yeah It never crossed my mind
To let you take your time
Now it seems that All I Need is Time