Rise the fallen

Gasping for breath as you take your last step
I see you fall..
I'm in a dream of uncertainty
And like an angel with broken wings,
I'm trying to catch you
Pushing as hard as I can go
Against the pain but Im still too slow
I only wish it wasn't true
I wonder why not me instead
I reach for you but I'm back in my bed

And I scream your name to the wind
I stop and listen it's silence again
I throw my fist at the wall
Can't help but thinking maybe this was all my fault
I've drifted away
Strait to the edge and right when I'm about to break

I can feel you all around me
As I'm going through the day
And i can hear you whisper in my ear
Everything will be okay
When I close my eyes I still see your face
Im caught up in an imaginary place

Your memory turns me to broken tears
Letting you go is my biggest fear
No matter how I try
You never leave my mind
And its harder than it seems
One last goodbye is all I need
But its just an empty hope
that fills my tattered soul
With promises I can't fulfill
The worlds spinning fast as I'm
standing still
And I'm left behind with the scars
Of losing you, wherever you are

Then I can feel you all around me
as I am sleeping through the night
I can hear you whisper in my ear
Everything will be alright
Closing my eyes, It kills me to find
You're slowly fading from my mind

Tonight I listen to the stars in the sky
I close my eyes and relax into the night
hanging my head between my hands
wondering when I'll see you again
You were everything to me
And I still cant suppress this undying need

To feel you all around me
Each and everyday
To want your presence in the air
To never go away
And even though it hurts to accept your gone
I have to face the fact that life goes on
Still your forever in my heart,
It's the only thing, keeping me strong

This is fantastic writing. It's long and involved (as are many good lyrics) so I can't really judge how well it would work musically. But I can certainly say that (a) it works really well in imagery and poetic expression, and (2) it's simply beautiful in its emotions and the message.

thank you should I shorten it some? because when I sing it I will admit its fairly long..