Destruct / Positive Negatives

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    DESTRUCT / POSITIVE NEGATIVES

    All these birds flying at me
    Looking to peck out my brain
    I can't, why can't I wave them away?
    I just let them eat me a little longer

    Until...

    I destruct
    Throwing feathers every way
    I destruct
    And the birds fly away for a while

    Pretty bluebirds coming for me
    Their eyes, they're just like me, insane
    I want them to fall so bad, but they stay
    As destructive positive negatives
    It's hard to see now, but they make me stronger

    I destruct
    Throwing birdbrains like pain away
    I destruct
    And the world goes away for a while


    OUTRO:
    One day, one day so soon
    One birds crashes
    Into bullet-proof glass
    Drops into flaming trash
    And soon, so soon after
    The others follow suit

    From the ashes
    Littered with beaks and losing streaks
    Rises the pheonix


    I really want constructive criticism on this one, on how I could better the flow to make it easier to read... or anything else really, but the flow of this is really what's bugging me and I don't know how I can fix it atm.
     

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