Dreams (never satisfied)

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  1. Hugo Zhor said:

    Default Dreams (never satisfied)

    Always when my dream comes true
    Already have another one
    A setting goal of something new
    I have never done

    Bridge:
    First of all it seems
    That all of my dreams
    Are so far away

    All I have to give
    To make my dreams live
    It is worth to pay

    When resolution is made
    I have to keep on holding tight
    To my own goal not to fade
    Fullfillment skyline

    Bridge:
    First of all it seems
    That all of my dreams
    Are so far away

    All I have to give
    To make my dreams live
    It is worth to pay

    Chorus:
    Higher and higher
    Through ice or through fire
    To make my dreams come true

    Straight ahead afore
    Through heat or through the roar
    To make my dreams come true

    Don´t care for a discouraged voice
    Of people living their grey lives
    I feel this is the right choice
    To know I´m alive

    Bridge:
    First of all it seems
    That all of my dreams
    Are so far away

    All I have to give
    To make my dreams live
    It is worth to pay

    Chorus 2:
    Down below and deep
    Running upright or creep
    To make my dreams come alive

    Not rot to the core
    That´s always do I for
    Never satisfied

    I´m to be
    ´till the end of time
    Never satisfied
    I´m to be
    ´till eternity
    Never satisfied
    Last edited by Hugo Zhor; 06-07-2011 at 09:41 AM. Reason: changes
     
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    SK'nDeep said:

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    This is a inspiring piece of work. I like the never say die mentality. I did see some area's for improvment. a few lines here and there seemed to be missing words.
    good start for what has potential to be a awsome song.
    Peace Love Empathy

    Sk'nDeep
     
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    MoonRide*r* said:

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    Ahoj Hugo. I think this seems to the smoothest lyrics of yours that I've read yet. And I'll give a hand on what Sk'nDeep mentioned, 2 or 3 things that could make this perfect in my opinion:

    Straight ahead afore
    Though heat or through the roar*
    To make my dreams come true

    Don´t care for a discouraged voice (or discouraging voice)
    Of people living their grey lives
    I feel this is the right choice
    To know I´m alive

    "I've to be" ..... do you mean the British way of contracting "I have"? ... in honesty I think it would sound in song if you say "I'm to be" or just say "I have to be" without making it a contraction.

    This is great, would love to hear it set to music!
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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  4. Hugo Zhor said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by SK'nDeep View Post
    This is a inspiring piece of work. I like the never say die mentality. I did see some area's for improvment. a few lines here and there seemed to be missing words.
    good start for what has potential to be a awsome song.
    Thank you for your comment.
    About missing words, there is different melody so rhyming verses aren´t the same long.
     
  5. Hugo Zhor said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by MoonRide42 View Post
    Ahoj Hugo. I think this seems to the smoothest lyrics of yours that I've read yet. And I'll give a hand on what Sk'nDeep mentioned, 2 or 3 things that could make this perfect in my opinion:

    Straight ahead afore
    Though heat or through the roar*
    To make my dreams come true

    Don´t care for a discouraged voice (or discouraging voice)
    Of people living their grey lives
    I feel this is the right choice
    To know I´m alive

    "I've to be" ..... do you mean the British way of contracting "I have"? ... in honesty I think it would sound in song if you say "I'm to be" or just say "I have to be" without making it a contraction.

    This is great, would love to hear it set to music!
    Ahoj Moonride

    thank you for your great suggestions and nice english lesson
     

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