It was suggested to me that I write a song with rap verses and a sung chorus. I'm happy with my chorus but I can't write rap for toffee!!! If any of the experts out there would like to suggest better verses, please do! Ive got the basic feel of them but I don't like the way they sound...

(Rapper / Singer)

It Turns

Oh... (it turns, it turns)
Oh... (man, the world just turns)

Verse (rap?)
They tell us to look forward but I can’t help looking back,
How can we make a difference when they tell us how to act?
I don’t get what they saying when they brainwash us each day,
They want us to be better, but they tell us what to say,
They can’t see them dying, see them falling, see them weep,
I’m walking down in Gucci with death down at my feet,
Walking through the concrete jungle, soon the only place,
That’s a jungle will be concrete, that’s something I can’t face,

Bridge (?)
Because they just want control but we can’t give it,
The only way to be free is to live it,

Chorus (sung)
Trying to find my footing,
In a world that turns too fast,
Trying to find a way to make,
Them help me make this last,
Because I can see them dying,
And I’m crying,
But the world just turns, it turns,

Verse (rap?)
The world is screaming, world is crying, and I’m here,
Trying tell you how I feel, my friend, I'm trying you show fear,
If we don’t start, then we won’t stop and I can’t see the end,
This isn’t ours alone and it’s what we’ve all gotta defend,
Keep your money, keep your bling and keep your green,
That’s what we gotta make the world, that’s what I’ve seen,
Seen the pain, the poison spreading, we’re losing our way,
Join me while you can, I’m gonna start this war today!

Bridge (?)
Because they just want control but we can’t give it,
The only way to be free is to live it,

Chorus (sung)
Trying to find my footing,
In a world that turns too fast,
Trying to find a way to make,
Them help me make this last,
Because I can see them dying,
And I’m crying,
But the world just turns, it turns,

It turns, it turns... (yeah, it turns)... it turns...

Hah, I love the combination of a lyricist writing a rap, this just works so well! You've used great imagery and metaphors, but it's still a rap song. Very well done to you my friend!

You think it's alright? I suck at this stuff but I wanted to challenge myself