on hold

OK this girl got mi on the baseline. tight around mi waist like a belt around my waistline.
we started off friends but she didn't wanna waist time, yeah i'm a dog ,shes a cat i gotta chaise mine
girl u said u had my back but then you lied and now u got me trippin like i didn't have my shoes tied.
while shes laphing and shes popping out another dudes child i feel like i got stabbed in my heart with two knives.
its getting hard but im still Trina hold mine plus im on hold like im on a telephone line.
getting her back in my life hit a land slide now im bout to blow out of my mind like a land mine.
and..........

she used to be my first lady. but now i'm going crazy because shes saying she hates me.
and to be quite honest iv been thinking about her lately but she is with another so i cannot call her baby.
she got me on hold and its really getting old plus my heart is like an ice box because its so cold iv been patiently waiting and desperately anticipating but in so sick of waiting and i don't think that i will make it.
we been through it all rain sleet hail snow so why she got me on hold i don't know

The rhymes in this are simply fantastic. You've got a good talent there! Nice lyrics, nice story line. Criticism? This is short!!
I could pick on your spelling but I won't

thanks i like cunstructive critisisem ima add u as a friend and u can read some of my other stuff