My song with mp3 to listen :)

HERE IS THE MP3:
http://montroseitalodisco.wrzuta.pl/..._-_eyes_-_demo

LYRICS
Among those frowning brows and angry looks
Her serene face shone like the sun after a storm
Oh, when she raised the lashes of her eyes
Something as if has seized my hear with a hand

CHORUS:
Senses struggle with my will
Had never seen eyes like these
Velvety, black, satin-like
full of fire, full of life

Forgot the crowd, saw only eyes
Velvety as the gazelle ones
My heart melted like spring snow
Blood drops quivered in me

VERSE 2
My glance fondled her shapely outlines
And her slightly opened lips of raspberry hue
Oh as if moistened with a mountain due
Her eyes flashing bright like pair of stars

PLEASE REVIEW IT

The second verse is well-written, particularly the second line: "And her slightly opened lips of raspberry hue". Somehow, I sense that you could add more to your lyrics. Draw the reader deeper into your creation instead of bringing them to the cliff and then disappearing.