my 1st post on here i hope you like it!! im Only 13 :D its called 'the girl i love'

For the Girl I Love

She’s out there I believe,
somewhere in the streets,
waiting to be complete,
and I’m waiting for her

I dropped my life and took,
a long lasting look,
and my body it was shook,
She’s out of this world

And I could bring you home,
and you’d never be alone
There’s more than I have shown
and I’ll always be waiting for you

And I could never leave,
I would always believe,
that you are the one for me,
and that’d be the truth

You have to start to find,
words you lost in your mind
Speak now and I’ll speak mine,
it’s true that I love you

We could be the show,
the ones that people know,
and honey I know where to go
But it’s all up to you

And I could bring you home,
and you’d never be alone
There’s more than I have shown
and I’ll always be waiting for you

And I could never leave,
and I would always believe,
that you are the one for me
And that’d be the truth

Don’t you know that you’re the line,
That I’d cross in this life of mine?
But it’d be just fine
It’s all honesty

You’re so beautiful and it’s true,
inside and out I love you,
and without you, don’t know what I’d do,
and I couldn’t ask for more

And I could never leave,
and I would always believe,
that you are the one for me,
and that’d be the truth

Yeah that’d be the truth,
that you are the one for me
That’d be the truth,
that you are the one for me

any comments about what you think please!

good with the ryhmes, but you should try to write more... structuraly? like try to make each line in a verse have almost the same amount of syllables. and i
d flow alot more smoothly, good job for a start