This Isn't Me

Thread: This Isn't Me

Tags: love, pain
  1. chrismcknight said:

    Cool This Isn't Me

    I've been hurting for such a long time
    For no one don't even care but you
    I've been wondering where would I be in the end
    Waiting to see if I get through

    Chorus
    This isn't me
    Makes you wonder why I'm here
    This isn't me
    Keeps me thinking, would this pain disappear
    This just isn't me no way

    I've been trying to hold on much longer
    To find that place that I need right next to you
    I've been working hard to get stronger
    In many ways just got to do what I got to do

    Chorus

    I've been all around in many directions
    Making many paths to try to get things right
    But I had realized that your love
    With me can make corrections

    Chorus

    © 2011 Chris McKnight
    Last edited by chrismcknight; 11-10-2011 at 05:53 PM.
     
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    Katie13 said:

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    I quite like the emotion of this, and I really like the second verse. But someitmes the flow is hard to follow and your lines sometimes need tweaking a bit - such as "Waiting to see would I get through" would be better if "would" were "if" - but that might just be me!! :P
    Overall, I quite like this! Good job
    "If you were me, then I'd be you, and if I were you, I'd hide somewhere faraway..."
     

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