My rap idea: give me feed back

I come from a place that’s beyond cursed
You've just been out-versed
Over rap I'm about to be dispersed
You better have rehearsed
It's time to make this reversed
So this time you fall head first

I come from a place when you're just beaten is nice
There's no such thing as paradise
There's all sorts to entice

I come from a place ruled by tyrants
Everything has to be violent
While most people stay silent
Stay high and vibrant

It's like a 5th dimension
You don't want any attention
Talk again and you've been hung from a second extension
Don't forget to mention
Better not have a dissension
There is no prevention

If you steal you get hung
A place where they kill off the young
No one will be among

I come from a place where there's no god
Where people beat you only in squads
People eating dirt in wads

A place where you pay up front
Where people can't even afford blunts
Never speak affront

A place where they kill for the white snobs
There's no way to get a job
Your throat always throbs

Suffering by the hand of god, it leaves you unable to speak
Unable to eat
Always weak
A place of horror that is unique

A place where you drink from murky water
No matter what might occur
Full of saboteurs

Destined to die in the sands of time
Death valley awaits all those who waste their line
Take this spot to regain your rhyme

Killings will never get admitted
No one is legit
Nothing ever gets submitted

You make a fist
They will insist
And assist
Make your life will never exist

All that has happened makes me ashamed to be white
Why couldn’t I be my true color in this light

Turn people on their own kind
Twist them on their own minds

People drive by, do hit and run
No escape from these guns
You better run, because if you get stunned
You're life becomes none

There's no such thing as peace
Just try to keep your body in one piece
As life slips you decrease
Don’t fight with police
Like living in ancient Greece
Where animals release
This new disease

In this place there is no survivors
No one is a driver

A place stuck in the old age
Where you get sliced with blades
Where there are non-stop raids
People fade, standing in the shade
Just the very thought leaves you dismayed

Make sure your life will never exist