One of my favourite songs i've written, would love to hear some feedback, cheers

so while i, try in vain
spilling ink on, every page
tell me that you love me
cause god knows this ain't easy
and every page i turn's
another one that's left to burn
and while the embers fade away
it leaves signs of what we made...

i try hard
i try not to think about those nights alone
my only company was the thought of you
so comforting
cause thoughts can't break open hearts
unlike your words which tore them apart
so violently
so i'll live in my dreams and risk the
nightmare that's the thought of breaking clean

so while i, try in vain
spilling ink on, every page
tell me that you love me
cause god knows this ain't easy
and every page i turn's
another one that's left to burn
and while the embers fade away
it leaves signs of what we made
tell me
would it hurt to stay?

hand me a blank slate and let me
re-write this story with a happy ending
but we all know they're just stories that haven't ended yet
please don't forget
for every day there's two regrets
for every night i dare to dream
and step right back into a world of mine
where it's easier than it seems

so while i, try in vain
spilling ink on, every page
tell me that you love me
cause god knows this ain't easy
and every page i turn's
another one that's left to burn
and while the embers fade away
it leaves signs of what we made
tell me
can we bring back yesterday?

but who am i to say
that this is just a game
when every kiss is just a breath to waste away?
we both, saw it rising high
but there's a shadow in the sky
and that vision of a hope just passes by
and every ocean filled with dreams is wasted dry

so while i, try in vain
spilling ink on, every page
tell me that you love me
cause god knows this ain't easy
and every page i turn's
another one that's left to burn
and while the embers fade away
please tell me
what would it take for you to stay?
it leaves signs of what we made

This song is very good especially love this part
we both, saw it rising high
but there's a shadow in the sky
and that vision of a hope just passes by
and every ocean filled with dreams is wasted dry

thanks buddy