I wrote a song...well ive actaully wrote a couple...

ive tried a hand a writing a couple of songs, but this is my latest, please be honest on what you think.....

MORE THAN ONCE:

I'VE SEEN THE WAY THAT THE GROUND OPENS UP,
WHEN YOU STOMP YOUR FEET ON THE GROUND 'CAUSE ITS ROUGH.
WHEN YOU FEEL LIKE CRYING 'CAUSE THERES NO ONE TO MEET,
IT SEEMS LIKE THEY HAVE LET YOU DOWN.

NOW THE PAIN AND THE FEAR IS SHOUTING OUT LOUD,
AND YOU STILL MOVE ON BEING ONE IN THE CROWD.
GOING THE DISTANCE 'CAUSE YOU FEEL THAT ITS RIGHT,
OUT OF SIGHT AND OUT OF MIND.

WILL YOU PLEASE,
SET ME FREE.
I CAN'T LIVE,
UNTIL YOU SEE.
EVERYTHING THAT YOU HAVE DONE TO ME.

THEY SAY THAT HISTORY IS MADE UP IN FACTS.
PICTURE PERFECT IS NOT WHAT IT SEEMS.
TIME TO LET YOU GO OF ME,
'CAUSE YOU'VE HURT ME,
MORE THAN ONCE.

SEEMS TO ME LIKE YOU ARE BROKEN INSIDE.
SAYING YES AND NO TO THINGS ALL THE TIME.
ONE MINUTE YOUR THERE AND THE NEXT YOU ARE GONE,
WILL YOU EVER GET IT FIGURED OUT?

NOW THE PAST IS REVEALING ITS UGLY SELF.
THE WORDS YOU HAVE SPOKEN ARE NOTHING BUT A LIE,
SHAKING UP BY ALL THIS MESS.
TRYING TO GET YOU FIGURED OUT,
SOMETHING WE SHOULD REALLY TALK ABOUT.

THEY SAY THAT HISTORY IS MADE UP IN FACTS.
PICTURE PERFECT IS NOT WHAT IT SEEMS.
TIME TO LET YOU GO OF ME,
'CAUSE YOU'VE HURT ME,
MORE THAN ONCE.

NOW THE TEMPERATURES RISING, FEELING THE HEAT TONIGHT.
GUESS I'LL BE STAYING HERE STAYING UP ALL NIGHT.
SOMEHOW YOU SEE ME AS SOMETHING YOUR NOT,
BUT IM STRONGER THAN WHAT YOU THINK.

NOW YOU SEE,
I AM FREE.
I CAN LIVE....

THEY SAY THAT HISTORY IS MADE UP IN FACTS.
PICTURE PERFECT IS NOT WHAT IT SEEMS.
TIME TO LET YOU GO OF ME,
'CAUSE YOU'VE HURT ME,
MORE THAN ONCE.

ITS SO GOOD TO FINALLY BE FREE.

LIFE WITHOUT YOU IS FINALLY CLEAR.

TIME TO LET YOU GO OF ME.

MORE THAN ONCE.


Please be honest on what you think .. thanks

Just a tip, don't use all caps, it reads as though you are shouting.

I only wrote it in capitals to seperate it from what I wrote that wasn't in the song haha

Please read No.10 here: http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/al...rum-rules.html

Thanks, I am now aware that I shouldn't have wrote it in capital letters but I'm new on here and didn't realise, also for the song, I suck at coming up with melodies in my head aswell as playing any instrument, so what I do is listen to songs I really like and somehow change their lyrics to mine, and the song the was used for this one was Drew Seeley - How a heart breaks! If you listen to the song you'll be able to understand how it goes as I wrote it, but any professional instrument player would probz be able to put their own backing music to it! Haha unfortunately I don't have those skills haha anyways thanks again, I'm glad you liked it