Honesty

Originally Posted by amaryn

I take /took this advice to my heart myself, though I do not want to "spoil my own style" your words do often lead to a better outcome
which is only a very positive thing on these threads; Being openminded is so utterly important to develop as a writer of good lyrics.
THANKS FOR EVERY BIT YOU HAVE DONE SO FAR, FLOWER BRO!

You're so Welcome!I try to give as much positive feedback as I can.I think people have gotten to know that I only want the best for them and their song.When I give a suggestion,like on your fantastic new song "Dance Under A Metal Moon" I do it with the hopes that it (the suggestion)will help to improve the Lyric.If the author disagrees,cool.I tried my best!

Hmm, good. Sure the 'Honesty' has to be pulled that long because this brand of Honesty stretches the truth too far

...or stretches too far from the truth

Originally Posted by curiosity_kills_the_cat

Hmm, good. Sure the 'Honesty' has to be pulled that long because this brand of Honesty stretches the truth too far

...or stretches too far from the truth

Thanks Cat.Now,you got a translator for the above message?

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Okay,I'm up at 4:41in the morning,so I want to tell you how this Really goes,when I sing it.

Your web was spun
You knew I'd fall
No hesitation
I gave my all

Then you started
To lead me on
I mis judged you
We don't belong

What first attracted
You to me
Was your honesty
Your honesty

Your hooooooooonnnnnnnneeeeeeeesssssssssttttttttttttttt eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Your hhhhhhhhhhhhooooooooooonnnnnnnnnneeeeeeesssssssttt ttttteeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Never the truth
Why always lie
Just to laugh at me
To see me cry

I once believed
That you were it
Not a lying cheat
A hypocrite

What first attracted
You to me
Was your honesty
Your honesty

Your hhhhhhhhhhhoooooooooonnnnnnnnnneeeeeeeeessssssssst tttttttttttteeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Your hhhhhhhhhhoooooooooonnnnnnnnnneeeeeeeeeessssssssss stttttttttteeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. Etc.


When I post my Song Lyrics,I don't always say exactly how it's supposeto be sung,
Sometimes I leave out the Chorus,sometimes I leave out the arrangement
I give folks enough to see the work,but I have hopes of someday recording,
So,I don't give everything away!

Again,your critique is one of the best I've read,keep on giving them!

That would suffice as a translator.

Now I gets it!thaaaaaaaaaaannnnnnnnnnnkkkkkkkkkkkk yyyyyyyyoooooooouuuuuuu!!!!!!!!

This was sweet man I really like this when read it aloud. Subtle emotion, but alot of it.. that's hard to do.

You know Doug. You continue to amaze me! I loved the fact that you kept it simple and yet said so many things with this one. Keep up the good work!

Originally Posted by Malay_razor

You know Doug. You continue to amaze me! I loved the fact that you kept it simple and yet said so many things with this one. Keep up the good work!

Thanks,Razor!This has had a long shelf life on ATL.I'm glad it appealed to so many folks.If I record it,I'll let you know.It sings way better than the "bare bones" lyrics would lead you to believe.(I tried to explain it in one of the earlier Comments)Thanks again,I do appreciate the kind words.

Originally Posted by Saybers Lyricals

Can i use this if i reference you, i have a song instrumental that i think would fit it perfectly

Hi Saybers Lyricals, Good for you, but please, if you make a song with these lyrics, please let us know where to find the video or audio to listen to it. Thanks in advance.

Good stuff Doug! I have met a woman like that in my past as well. I especially like the last verse. It seems women (a lot of them) always go for the players and keep the nice guys as friends and then when they get their heart broke, they say all guys are the same. We men know that women can be players and dishonest too. Good job on this man.

Originally Posted by mexico62

Hi Saybers Lyricals, Good for you, but please, if you make a song with these lyrics, please let us know where to find the video or audio to listen to it. Thanks in advance.

Thanks for the support,my friend.Saybers Lyricals wrote that in June of last year.He got in touch with me saying that he reregistered at ATL under a different name and he hadn't had "the time"to put Honesty to music.I haven't heard a word since.

Doug,
This one is HOT..it's POPPIN!! One of your best...honest (excuse the pun) lyrics, heartfelt rhymes...l love it!

Originally Posted by jessie zuppo

Doug,
This one is HOT..it's POPPIN!! One of your best...honest (excuse the pun) lyrics, heartfelt rhymes...l love it!

Thanks Jessie!It's got a lot of real deep seeded feelings throughout.Glad you liked it!

This is great! I can imagine writing something similar to be honest!

Maybe we should try to write one together.........someday in the future!

That would be fantastic!