Breathless

Hi Guys! I am a newbie and I am glad that I found this site! It feels like I just met my soulmate
Anyway I love to write songs,poetry and hope to find a job relating to my interest
Please guide me in my musical journey!

[Breathless]
I am breathless
Suffocating to the core
With things thrown at me
And I can't catch them all
Feeling Hopeless with things
I can't amend
Waiting for the day of the end

Nobody's listening
Nobody hearing me out at all
I have to walk thru this by myself
All alone by myself

Why couldn't you lend a hand
Or a listening ear my dear friend
I am struggling
in cold, dark and fear

Nobody's noticing
Nobody's picking me up at all
When I fell down
Hurt my own self
Who is going to save me
If I called

Save me, Save me now
Help me, Help me get out
No matter what, Rain or shine
I will be waiting here for you
to save me and help me get out

I am still a complete newbie at songwriting so the song and the structure might be weird
Hope you guys could give me comments and I would improve! Thanks!

One word: WOW!!!!! Your lyrics are amazing!! I don't know how you could improve it so I am just going to continue saying how amazing I think your song is keep up the great work

Hi,
You can forget about the word "weird", it's okay.
I am newbie like you, but I am writting just for fun and for the others, so I won't help you with your carrer.
I can say just good luck