Gravity

Down ah street so empty
I can see the look of serenity
I can hold on tight to the world beneath
With my toes holding on to the earth with my feet
"chorus"
Do you know
That gravity
Is beginning
To let go of me
Floating me away
Right out of my dreams
I can feel as I glide
Over the sea
Gravity..........
Why are you so lonely

I wander down an empty road
Trying so hard to grab a rope
But gravity seems to be angry at me
As I float away from the street
I try to grab on to the ground
But I float away at the speed of sound
"chorus"
Do you know
That gravity
Is beginning
To let go of me
Floating me away
Right out of my dreams
I can feel as I glide
Over the sea
Gravity..........
Why are you so lonely

I've lost all my traction
Due to the action
Of floating away
I want to be here to stay
Gravity
Can you hear me
Leave me alone
Let me be
Gravity
Gravity
Why are you so lonely
"Bridge"
You think you can play
Your games
You think you can do anything
But your wrong
So wrong
So let me go
Let me be
Gravity.....
Why are you so lonely
"chorus"
Do you know
That gravity
Is beginning
To let go of me
Floating me away
Right out of my dreams
I can feel as I glide
Over the sea
Gravity..........
Why are you so lonely
Gravity
Why are you so lonely
Gravity
Why are you
So lonely

Heys this is fresh right out of my brain so it may have mistakes or may not make sense bare with me I'll fix any issues hope u like where it is so far.

"I wander down an empty road
Trying so hard to grab a rope
But gravity seems to be angry at me
As I float away from the street
I try to grab on to the ground
But I float away at the speed of sound"

Real good. Many sylobals per line and you make them mesh together almost perfectly.

I have a suggestion in one line, may be out of place by saying so but maybe;
"I can hold on tight to the world beneath
With my toes holding on *to the curve of my feet*
*with the curve*
*to the curb of*
* to the earth with my feet*
Idk I just like playing around with certain words to draw a connection of assonance with end rhymes or slant rhymes etc.
But regardless this is yet another real solid scripture.

I like "to the earth with my feet" thanks for the help man I appreciate it.

I like how the songs feels very poetic

Thank you josh you're so kind.

My pleasure John. And like I say often, when I make only small suggestions like that it only means that I've found nothing wrong with your piece at all and but that I would feel cheap to just say "good job, I love it" aha