Girls

this one is about some girls who complain about men all being the same but are not willing to give a chance to the good men out there because of there looks,trend or society status hope you enjoy and improvements welcome. PS this isn't aimed at all girls lol

you girls believe boys are
always doing wrong
but you dont understand
we just want to belong

you take your points of view
from people in front of you
and for the guys with the right heart
all you do is tear them apart

girls give him a shot
give him one last look
before he loses the plot
he is only a half read book

you have your standards set so high
somewhere no man can fly
yet you cant complain
that all men are the same

its true the good guy comes last
no matter how hard they try
you move by them so fast
there just a blur in your eye

girls give him a shot
give him one last look
before he loses the plot
he is only a half read book

muscles don't make beauty
its the stuff from inside
this is now my duty
to open your eyes wide

this is not all girls
some stay pure and true
those who say no to pearls
i say, i love you

girls give him a shot
give him one last look
before he loses the plot
he is only a half read book

This is a good Song Lyric.My only suggestion would be in the first stanza,cut "Like you"."We just want to belong"is much stronger,no wasted words.Dats about it,good job!

Another song treasure! No offense is taken--it is a song of truth! How often I have said this to females in my family. The money may not last, the wild one will just trail off to another woman, the ultra-handsome one might lose his hair and get a middle-age spread. Date the guy with qualities you love, not looks that are vain. The inner qualities and the man will remain. My teen motto was: Never trust a handsome guy. By that, no offense to you who are handsome, but such a man would have to prove what he was on the inside first before I paid much attention to him. But just an ordinary guy, with a good heart and principles, reliable and truthful--that's The Man!

Another well-written, meaningful song that I'll come back to read again . . .

If Miss Jasmine says this is a Treasure,it is!She's said it all,judge a guy on his inner qualities;like how good of a poet or artist he is.
Good looks are great,but........time catches up with the"pretty people"most of all.If you've got nothing(as far as looks go)you've got nothing to lose.If you were the homecoming Queen,it probably more painful when Father Time catches up with you,and he always does!I used the Homecoming Queen as a metaphor,it applies to the Homecoming King as well.And I was kinda joking about judging him on how good of a poet or artist,being honest,loyal and a good story teller count as well!

Thank you for the kind words again it really is an honour to have two amazingly talented writers like my lyrics
And thanks doug for the advice on how to improve it, i get what you mean about it being stronger. Less is more in this case

Great piece with good metaphors, imagery, and strong conveyed concepts. Frankie said everything (makes me look bad ) so I don't have anything to add, only my compliments. Good job bud

thanks bud means a lot

I aver to Doug's top-notch song-writing skills.
But I have to say personally that I liked the "like you" being in the first stanza. (I should have spoken up earlier.)

Why? When "like you" was in "Girls," I understood perfectly that this is a guy talking not just all about himself; but he's given thought to how females feel.

you girls believe boys are
always doing wrong
but you dont understand
we just want to belong,

A girl might take "we just want to belong" as "I just want to belong with the GUYS." Your meaning is, "I want to belong to SOMEONE.” (Is this right-or not?) Since it's the first stanza of the song, the meaning carries more importance. LATER in the song your view is made perfectly clear. However, I liked being acknowledged by the "like you" at the beginning!

I know beat-wise, Doug has given you the right advice. Socially/emotionally, though, you want "Girls" to hear what you really mean and feel. (OWO!)

This is merely an opinion I felt duty-bound to express! I said your song is a treasure and that stands!! Keep up the great work!!

And I know Doug will still be speaking to me after this, even if he disagrees!

wow as if i missed this advice from frankie, such a let down on my part. some awesome words of encouragement so thanks

Great lyric. Loved the last stanza. Tells the whole gist of it really!!

True perfection!