How much hope get lost
from my heart... How
much I feel sadness steal
my happiness... How
much
I need to be near you...
beside you again!!!!
When
I sit in my room I feel
sadness and I cry... I do
not
know
why... why sometimes I
need to cry!! Every day I
try
to get meaning for my
life...
and a purpose, but life
so
hard on me
because you are not in
it...Every day I
try to overcome on the
sadness which violates
my
feelings but I.... How
much
I love
to stand alone under the
rain...
to watch my tears fall
with rain drops, fall
on my body and telling
me... do
not be sad you will find
happiness in the second
world.
Moments of my
life get close to the
end with the
silence of darkness. I
want
to
leave this world and get
come
to yours... There
we will meet every day ..
We will live for our noble
love.
There the words has a
different feeling and
happiness our
hearts will never stop
when
we hold our hands and
talk
by our ideas, the
sadness
will disappear from our
hearts and we will hold
the
eternity. Why you have
died!!!!!
and left me here in this
miserable world, I
walking in away has not
end...
or maybe will get
end, but Whispers your
voice
touch my heart and tell
me (I miss you so much).
I
will cry until sadness get
burning, and
embrace you.
You and I, my love will
live
millions of years in our
world and our
hearts will feel that
happiness forever.
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Heart of Steel....by manowar -
I like the expression you put into this, meaning the way you brought it out in words.
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Some tips on grammar (maybe some of these were just mistakes in typing):
Instead of "overcome on the sadness", just say "overcome the sadness".
"There the words have different meaning" (Use "has" only with a third-person singular noun)
"when we hold hands" or "when we hold each other's hands" (don't use "our" in that context)
-- I hold your hand
-- you hold my/his/her hand
-- we hold hands
"Why have you died!!!" (In a question, split the complex verb, or reverse the order of the verb and object noun)
"I am, or I'm waking in a way that has no end" or "does not end"
"or maybe will find an end"
"but whispers of your voice can or will touch my heart and tell me"
"I will cry until sadness burns" or "is burning"
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This is very nice to readThere is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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So nice!!!! Thank you so much for your help that was a nice thing. I have a book about English
grammars and every time I
start read from it, I feel need to sleep, I do not understand any thing only a
few things. But your
explanation is so clear and easy!!!! I like your style of writing.Last edited by dark1979; 10-18-2012 at 10:42 AM.
Heart of Steel....by manowar -
Dark1979;
Don't worry,you're not the only one that feels the need to sleep when it comes to English grammar!We came over here( the U.S.)after the Civil War,and we are still learning how to speak and spell properly!Last edited by Doug Denslowe; 10-19-2012 at 11:58 AM. Reason: Added the U.S.
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Thank you for your reply!! I understand what you mean....
Heart of Steel....by manowar