Someone read my song

Holding on to things I used to know
Listening to songs from long ago

I'm taking my chances
I'm living in the light
And this world of darkness wont kill me tonight
Yes I was stronger when you were still mine

Never thought that I could be alone
Couldn't see me standing on my own

I'm taking my chances
Of living in the light
And this world of darkness might kill me tonight
But I was stronger when I still called you mine, mine, mine

Here I stand, here I stand
With all the blame
Here I go, here I go
Carrying my shame
I dont' know, I dont know
Which way to go
Cause livin' without you isn't livin' at all

Picture frames so full of memories
And the smile that you had saved for me
The sins of my past are
Blocking all the light
If only, if only
I didn't drink that night
You would still be here
You would still be mine
Mine

Here I stand, here I stand
With all the blame
Here I go, here I go
Carrying my shame
I dont' know, I dont know
Which way to go
Cause livin' without you isn't livin' at all

Living without you, Livin without you
would leave me alone

Here I stand, here I stand
With all the blame
Here I go, here I go
Carrying my shame
I dont' know, I dont know
Which way to go
Cause livin' without you isn't livin' at all
woah woah oh oh woah oh oh woaaah.

Originally Posted by EraCah53

Holding on to things I used to know
Listening to songs from long ago

I'm taking my chances
I'm living in the light
And this world of darkness wont kill me tonight
Yes I was stronger when you were still mine

Never thought that I could be alone
Couldn't see me standing on my own

I'm taking my chances
Of living in the light
And this world of darkness might kill me tonight
But I was stronger when I still called you mine, mine, mine

Here I stand, here I stand
With all the blame
Here I go, here I go
Carrying my shame
I dont' know, I dont know
Which way to go
Cause livin' without you isn't livin' at all

Picture frames so full of memories
And the smile that you had saved for me
The sins of my past are
Blocking all the light
If only, if only
I didn't drink that night
You would still be here
You would still be mine
Mine

Here I stand, here I stand
With all the blame
Here I go, here I go
Carrying my shame
I dont' know, I dont know
Which way to go
Cause livin' without you isn't livin' at all

Living without you, Livin without you
would leave me alone

Here I stand, here I stand
With all the blame
Here I go, here I go
Carrying my shame
I dont' know, I dont know
Which way to go
Cause livin' without you isn't livin' at all
woah woah oh oh woah oh oh woaaah.

Hi,

I like the idea that you are writing but I feel like you are all over the board. Meaning the lines are vague and I can't see the picture clearly. You're just complaining...(which is ok) but to tell the story of what I think you are trying to say you need to get more detailed.

I would start out your first verse with this line, cuz it states exactly how you feel
Yes I was stronger when you were still mine

the words before it don't set up this line and it is the best one in the grouping.

Thats my 2 cents keep or sweep!

I think you ought to arrange the lyrics into the required parts.e.g verse,chorus etc.And um,avoid repeating words in different verses..be a little bit creative and hopefuly with that,you'l come up with a nice song.

Thank you guys for replying I appreciate your opinions and will keep them in mind.