my life

I have to bury my life
Just to hide it
Shut you out
Just to face it
This life
The dispair

I've tried but it to hard
I've died from this pain
Take this life
You can have it

I would let this come back
And haunt me
I've tried for so long
To get this far
But you come back for more

I've tried but it to hard
I've died from this pain
Take this life
You can have it


Take this life
I'm empty inside
Nothing left
Of me anymore

I've tried but it to hard
I've died from this pain
Take this life
You can have it

I like this, especially the 1st verse. It reads a lot like a poem, but I know with the right music it can sing for itself. On this verse:

Take this life
I'm empty inside
Nothing left
Of this anymore

I was thinking (and only my opinion) that it would have more force if you put "Of me anymore" because you are talking about yourself throughout the song. Anyway, I like it and thought I would put my two cents in. Nice job

Yes i think that is much better. Thanks!

A last ditch effort to make sense out of life. Your writing is haunted!

What do you mean when you said "Your writing is haunted!"