At one of the first rehearsals of my first band the guitar player came up with a chord sequence. I played a melody on my keyboard and the singer started improvising the first two lines. The song never got beyond this point. Years later (the band having split up) I completed the song.

Never really knew how this world
Depended so much on the love you gave
Never really really thought I lived my life
Acting like a puppet or slave
Never really believed losing you
Could cause me so much trouble, so much pain
Never really felt this loneliness
It reached my soul and there it will remain

Felt like cruising the streets at night
Feeling like a stranger in a strange land
The world has changed and so have I
Felt like trying somebody new
Making eyes at all the girls I see
But all they do is remind me of you
Someone who walks like you
Someone who talks like you
Someone who smiles
Like you used to smile
But this resemblance
Just lasts for a while

Feel like cleaning up the house today
Rummaging through all my papers and stuff
I alway stumble on something from you
Just a note you wrote
Or a postcard you sent
Or that photograph
That always made us laugh
Because I smiled
So stupidly

Peter.....the lyrics are great!I only wish you'd given us more of a hint as to what style or rhythm you had in mind for this song.I know this is a "lyrics review"but the more you can give the reader,the better!

Thanks Doug! The song is a rock ballad, a bit like Heaven by Bryan Adams (but not as slow) or Alone by Heart

Originally Posted by Peter Both

Thanks Doug! The song is a rock ballad, a bit like Heaven by Bryan Adams (but not as slow) or Alone by Heart

I'll check out the songs you referenced and if there's anything I can add,I will.

The closing line gave me a whole new prospective on the entire piece. I don't know if that's what you meant but that's how I got it. Like instead of just being sad or upset about the situation you feel regret towards it also.

The lyrics are top notch usually lost love song make me want to puke but not this one its actually a deeper look at the experience.

Originally Posted by Johnb31

The lyrics are top notch usually lost love song make me want to puke but not this one its actually a deeper look at the experience.

John!How unromantic of you!!Shame on you!!

Originally Posted by StripedSweater

The closing line gave me a whole new prospective on the entire piece. I don't know if that's what you meant but that's how I got it. Like instead of just being sad or upset about the situation you feel regret towards it also.

It was not a conscious decision to shift the prospective here. I wanted to enhance the feeling of being upset and sad by showing that memories of her are all over the place. But subconsciously, maybe I did: 'Look at this guy with that stupid smile, he's made a fine mess of it. He let her walk out of his life'. But, thanks for your comment, I really appreciate it!

Originally Posted by Johnb31

The lyrics are top notch usually lost love song make me want to puke but not this one its actually a deeper look at the experience.

Agree with Johnb31!
Peter, you're a poet.