Wake up and look at the roses
Wake up and smell the sky
Let out all of your emotions
And release your lighter side
"Chorus"
living on the edge of my life
flipping back and forth
Don't know what's right
I've been living a mixed up
Kind of life
Wake up and breathe in the fire
Wake up get burned by the smoke
Try to prove your not a liar
Try to not choke
"Chorus"
living on the edge of my life
flipping back and forth
Don't know what's right
I've been living a mixed up
Kind of life
Yeah I've been living
A mixed up kind of life
"Bridge"
I don't know if I will ever find
A way to reorganize
My life, my time and who I am inside
I don't know if I'll ever know
Right side up from upside down
But I guess I'll try anyway
I guess I'll search for a way
"Chorus"
living on the edge of my life
flipping back and forth
Don't know what's right
I've been living a mixed up
Kind of life
A mixed up
Kind of life
And I don't know
What is right
Cause I've been living
A mixed up kind of life
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Mixed Up Life
Last edited by Johnb31; 11-14-2013 at 01:27 PM.
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This is flat out cool!I only could suggest that the "I've been" be cut from the first two lines of the chorus.I think it'd make it tighter,less wordy.Otherwise,love this tune!
Update:I'm glad you took my advise!Rereading this, it flows much better!Last edited by Doug Denslowe; 11-14-2013 at 03:46 PM. Reason: It flows better remark
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Well of course I took your advice Doug you are king of song writing on this site I can't argue against that. Plus it does flow way better.
There is not enough space or time to truly let the song unwind -
It flows, rocks and rolls! It may be an odd idea, but could this song work with a beat like Iggy Pop's "Lust For Life"?
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Actually you know what it could work with maybe a more modern sound to it but that's pretty close.
There is not enough space or time to truly let the song unwind -
The chorus is incomplete; the idea is not fully realized. I would change "Let out all of your emotions" (the third line of the first part) to perhaps "Release the weight" or "Unburden yourself of usual ways".
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Thank you for the helpful criticism!
There is not enough space or time to truly let the song unwind -
Most songwriters are mixed up.
Jim Colyer Girl albums -
Hoy guys are digging up this ancient song I forgot about it haha.
There is not enough space or time to truly let the song unwind