She steps outside in the pouring rain
Swears she isn't ever coming back again
She sets her face straight against the pain
Promises herself that she'll forget about him
She's getting away all over again
He hurt for the last time, yes, it's for the last time
She's getting herself away from him
Once again she's leaving it all behind, for the last time
She takes the cab to the train station
Sets down on the bench with her bags
She hasn't thought about her destination
But any place is better than the one she had
She's getting away all over again
He hurt for the last time, yes, it's for the last time
She's getting herself away from him
Once again she's leaving it all behind, for the last time
She takes the cab back to their home
Where he's waiting for her to come back
He swears he's changed while she was gone
But we all know the truth about that
She's back with him all over again
He feeds her that line, yes, it's the hundredth time
She's letting herself go back to him
Once again everything is fine, there wasn't any crime
For the thousandth time
For God knows how many times
Only God knows how many times
Until she escapes when she dies
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"The Last Time... Again"
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"She takes the cab to the train station
Sets down on the bench with her bags
She hasn't thought about her destination
But any place is better than the one she had"
This is brilliant!
The only thing I can really think of as far as improvements is the last stanza. I feel like the last 2 lines don't really fit together. I mean, I get that it's part of the story, but combining them just feels like awkward. Perhaps it's the way the last sentence is worded maybe? I'm not sure. Anyway, that's my comment
Great job altogether!~Kerri Faye -
Thanks. I felt there was something out of wack but I couldn't figure it out. The last 2 stanzas on which verse? The one that you quote above or a different one?
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Oh yeah, that needs some work most definitely. I will eventually fix it.