Self

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  1. Jim Colyer's Avatar

    Jim Colyer said:

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    I can't feel sorry for anybody
    Too busy feeling sorry for myself
    I can't sympathize with anyone
    Too busy looking out for myself

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    My sister says I'm selfish
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    I prefer self-centered
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    Self-oriented sounds even better
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    It's every man for himself

    We're all going down with this ship
    Nobody on this boat can survive
    If you don't drown, the sharks will get you
    Bloody the water, eat you alive

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    My sister says I'm selfish
    Self
    I prefer self-centered
    Self
    Self-oriented sounds even better
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    It's every man for himself

    You must believe in self-defense
    It's a vicious world out there
    I'm taking care of number one
    Death is the only thing we share

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    My sister says I'm selfish
    Self
    I prefer self-centered
    Self
    Self-oriented sounds even better
    Self
    It's every man for himself

    Jim Colyer ascap
     
  2. Problem Child's Avatar

    Problem Child said:

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    I really like this. It could use a little bit of editing to make the rhyme scheme a little more complicated and, therefore, more attention grabbing. I like how you stuck to the topic though. I think it's a topic that many people can relate with, and that it's something that isn't really talked about much, but the way you did it was near perfect. With a little more length, love, and editing, this can be gold.