choas + Pain = Life

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  1. cadillac19 said:

    Default choas + Pain = Life

    I find myself once again on the end of a losing fight
    The one thing that i wanted, has now passed by
    Leaving a crater where i stood, and a shell of myself
    The moment slowly is being drained of its once bright enegry
    All I can do from above is watch my former self slowly burn like a forgotten cigarette
    The ending to this night secures my doomed furture
    Where its Me, Myself, and I, no others to disappoint, inturn saving myself
    Assuring that I will never suffer or cause selfinflicting pain
    Where everything i have has its order, and knows where it belongs
    Its like structure, everything has it's place
    Every action and atom has a purpose, nothing is done without reason
    So as i sit here drenched in a cold sweat caused by words never wanting to hear
    Knowing that familiar taste of failure i wonder why i asked, why i cared so much
    I have no answer to these questions, only scars from the results
     
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    Girl next door said:

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    English is not my native language so there are just some suggestions:

    ..."at" the end of a losing fight
    ... no others to disappoint "in order to save" myself
    ...caused by words "I never wanted" to hear

    Overall I really like this verse! Its full of emotions and attitude
     

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