the real me

hiding behind a mask
friend around every corner
why cant i be myself
i need to let it out

there is a deep cry
inside my heart
it needs to be released
why is it so dang hard

to be what they wanna see
thick skin a hard layer
say and do what you please
i am bulletproof

as fake as i can be
im blind i need help to see
the real me

Hi there! These lyrics have the potential to be really good, I like what is written so far, it shows some depth to the person in the lyrics and has a potentially good theme to it, you normaly get a good song out of this type of topic! However I would suggest making your lyrics longer, it's a bit too short at the moment and needs more buiding to it, I also feel it needs a chorus. I'd leave in the lyrics you've got at the moment, but also combine part of them to form a chorus as well e.g. 'As fake as I can be, hiding behind a mask, I'm blind I need help to see, the real me' . But as I said before still leave those lines in there place as well and then it is showing a continuation, throughout the song! Great potential, very nice

i agree with 'spudmunky' haha.
what you have is good, and i think if you built on it, and added more, it could be very good.