1st Draft of new lyrics

new song, it's a little idk suicidal lol. just a little. More of an alternative or Mtal sound, lemme know what you think. Thanks

My Goodbye

Its ok,
Do what I say.
Don’t make it loose,
Tighten the noose.
Leave me in distress,
Lay me to rest.

I need your help now more then ever.
Take my body, start to sever.
Through death ill live forever.
No longer shall I try,
so I must die.
And this is my good bye (I must die)
And this is my goodbye (I must die)

Don’t be afraid,
This is what I want.
This is what I need,
Can’t take it anymore,
Time to bleed.
Life is long,
life should be short,
cant do this alone,
I need your support.

I need your help now more then ever.
Take my body, start to sever.
Through death ill live forever.
No longer shall I try,
so I must die.
And this is my good bye (I must die)
And this is my goodbye (I must die)

Why do people always put suicidal lyrics and say "it's a metal sound"?

Only kiddie metal is suicidal, adult metal like Slayer and Iron Maiden lifts me up and makes me feel better (although I'm a pretty ok person anyway).


Personally I'd do this is a goth (which isn't rock or metal, it's goth) style...

Like this:

http://youtube.com/watch?v=CVnSGXvYK20
Gerrard McMan - Cry Little Sister