Four years to the day (country or rock)

Four years to the day- country or rock song - lyric feedback


I had this odd little idea a while back about two high schoolers falling in love yet they just act as friends cause she is a senior and he's a freshman. Finally a week before graduation she falls apart and tells him that she needs him. He says he needs her but how is this going to work. They discuss it and decided that when she graduates from college they have to discuss it and possibly end it.So it finally four year later and the guy on one hand wants to break it off cause she needs to be able to leave the area and get a job on the other hand he loves her

(I'm sorry that it is written so badly i know there is no rhyming and it barely a song but any ideas are helpful.)


It's a week till four years to the day
Since we both broke down and said ok

Only a week to graduation
When you say if you go or stay

Baby I need you but it's no fair for me to hold you back

I'm finishing my first year of college
But you are almost done with your last

I go back to four years ago
You a pretty senior who didn't even glance
at a freshman who didn't have a chance
we grew together without saying a word about being anything more then friends

Cause we knew reason said it just wouldn't work
you leaving for college while i was still in high school

Guy's solo

I guess it a good thing our hearts don't listen to reason

Cause three days before you left for college you broke down and said
You were scared of being alone and without me by your side

I said i was more scared then you cause you the thing that gave me focus
and kept me from going insane

Cause my family situation wasn't always that great i didn't have to many friends to lean on

So i needed you but no it just wouldn't work not with you in college
and me stuck in high school

we would only meet on the weekends
I couldn't even drive
But we were scared to be together and even more to be apart

(interlude)

We need each other but it's not fair for me to hold you back

I know they sent you a letter
saying that there was a job down south with your name on it

You may of hid it in your car but i found it last Sunday
I was to ready make you take it

so i called your phone but i hung up before
you answered because i couldn't make you go

I guess it a good thing my hearts doesn't listen to reason

Girl's Solo

It's 1460 days since i broke down and cried
you say we have to talk about the future

and that you saw the job offer in my car

I said I need you to hold me tight

Just hold me tight tonight and don't worry about the future
Cause i can't live with out you by my side
Your more then worth another three years of waiting

Duet

Just hold me tight tonight and don't worry about the future
Cause i can't live with out you by my side
We're more then worth another three years of waiting

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Tell me what you think if you have any ideas to improve it or any ideas for a Melodie.
*updated lyrics

I love it! I use the melodies of other songs to write my lyrics to, so it's easier.
Here are some verses and lines you could add:

I'm thinking back on the past
It's true that time is flying by too fast

You used to call me your dreamer
and now i can live out my dream
but it's no dream if you can't see
everything that's happening for me

Thanks for the ideas i love them but i can' find a place for the firstone and the second doesn't fit with the mood of the song it's to poetic this guy think his girl is going to leave him and even though it's killing him part of her is telling her to go because he doesn't realize she feels as deeply cause he's a idiot.

tracy-turnbald, im not sure what you were saying there,
but miley cyrus wrote those lyrics.
"I'm thinking back on the past
It's true that time is flying by too fast

You used to call me your dreamer
and now i can live out my dream
but it's no dream if you can't see
everything that's happening for me"

the song is called i miss you or something like that...
its not cool to steal lyrics.

I won't lie and say I didn't know cuz I did, I just thought it would fit. You've gotta admit, Miley's lyrics are good! Actually I changed the second one alittle, Miley's lyrics are 'You used to call me your dreamer, and now I'm nowi'm living out my drea, Oh how I wish you could see everything that's happening for me'

alright... as long as you admitted it...
and i don't really pay attention to the whole
disney scene... so i really haven't heard any of her
songs that haven't played on our local radio station...
just give people credit for their work next time, okay?

Thanks for telling me this but do you have any suggestions for my song.

hey, great ideas. the only thing i can say about this is the rhyming seems a little forced. rhyming is an important piece, but if you find your changing sentences from the way you would speak them its more of a poem. other than that its great

Just thought i would Tell you it went From to the working title of
"Four Years to The Day"
to
"Can't Hold You Back"

Pleas tell me what you think of the new name

This is absolutely terrific!

Nice Format... and you used desciptive details... it's written proffesionally and in a a very awkward way!

4.7/5

Thanks but your review kinda was contradictory you said it was written proffesionally but you also said in a very awkward way.

What do you mean by this and what can i do to fix it