this song might be a little explicit though but enjoy.

'Fallen Angles want to get hurt"

A lady devil
Behind a mask of an angel
Hold me up in chains
Restricted me with pains
You took my soul away from me
For all eternity
You never wanted me to live
Get a lava pool ready for me to dive

A slow and burning death
Say a word that show no regrets

I’m feeling alive and passing through
My thorny path has prove that I’ve been abused
To carves your name in my hand
Symbolize the devil with my blood
Eating my sins that bring damnation
Bring me closer to heaven’s foundation
Hey lady, I won’t go to church
‘Cause fallen angels want to get hurts!

Redeem yourself with virtue, make your name in white
Overflowing ecstasy make you taste it in delight
Use me, abuse me and torn me apart
Counting your sins is the devil’s way to start

Luscious insanity
Oh virtue, please kill me

I’m feeling alive and passing through
My thorny path has prove that I’ve been abused
To carves your name in my hand
Symbolize the devil with my blood
Eating my sins that bring damnation
Bring me closer to heaven’s foundation
Hey lady, I won’t go to church
‘Cause fallen angels want to get hurts!

Lick on my wounds, so tender and wet
Strips me with claws, the heaven and hell has met
Hey lady devil, I’m your to sin
Fall from heaven with broken wings

A slow and burning death
Say a word that show no regrets

Luscious insanity
Oh virtue, please kill me

I’m feeling alive and passing through
My thorny path has prove that I’ve been abused
To carves your name in my hand
Symbolize the devil with my blood
Eating my sins that bring damnation
Bring me closer to heaven’s foundation
Hey lady, I won’t go to church
‘Cause fallen angels want to get hurt
‘Cause fallen angels want to get hurt
‘Cause fallen angels want to get hurt

Hey lady, I won’t go to church
‘Cause fallen angels want to get hurt yeah!

I love these lyrics =) Sorry to say but most of the stuff I see on this site are... not um... my favorite. But you do a good job, I'm pretty sure I've commented on your lyrics before.
Now I just need to know how the song itself would go! :P
(Sorry that I lack suggestions.)

Me likes ;P
What genre is this?
My favorite part:

"I’m feeling alive and passing through
My thorny path has prove that I’ve been abused
To carves your name in my hand
Symbolize the devil with my blood
Eating my sins that bring damnation
Bring me closer to heaven’s foundation
Hey lady, I won’t go to church
‘Cause fallen angels want to get hurts!"

I would love to hear this put to music!

Excellent poem! The following is an example of how to "smooth" some of the rough spots (hopefully without straying from the intent/meaning of the poem):

A lady devil
Behind an angel’s mask
Held me in chains
A prisoner of pain
My soul taken from me
For all eternity

Into the lava pool I dive
Never meant to survive
A slow and burning death
With no words of regret…

Yet, I feel alive passing through
My thorny path of abuse
In my hand it carves your name
Praises the devil with my shame
Tallies my sins that bring damnation
And separates me from heaven’s foundation…
But lady, I won’t go to church
‘Cause fallen angels like to get hurt!

wow atmaster, your words simply put in a great flows O.o although with the part of lady devil, i was simply rhyming with angel because it also make sense too. damn i love how you put rephrase the chorus. <3 just now I sing the chorus and it flow beautifully ^^.

Ninja TK I'm glad you appreciate my song, the genre is actually i think it's christian rock or just rock. most of my songs have similiar melodies as the Creed and the all american rejects.

Kate Agony, I rememer that you comment on Apocalypse, which you thought it was emo XD. but I'm glad you like it though.

Like I said, my comments are only suggestions. Personally I not "happy" with all of my suggestions for the first verse. For me, the last line is a rough transition from the rest of the verse. Your poem has a free format feel so you don't have to impose a limitation of rhyming every couplet. I guess I felt that "devil" and "angel" are a weak rhyme... Keep up the good work!

but still your suggestion is very good, I realize I wasn't able to think thoroughly because I was in a crisis with a girl XD. but at least the problem just solve few days ago.

That was very beautiful
Did u write it??/ sorry im new,
anyone who has that soul to write something like must have been through some hard ship
but it was simply beautiful

thanks fallen angle tear, but to be honest, the "hard ship" i went through was just a bump in the road. but i imagine to be in that situation and write. i tell you this, a lot of songs i wrote, not even one third of them i even went through the situations lol.