a song i wrote, please tell me what you think, i dont know if its ne good

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  1. mrtsligo said:

    Default a song i wrote, please tell me what you think, i dont know if its ne good

    REGRET @

    Regret is why i wrote this song,
    iv been waiting just so long,
    iv told you once, two times now three,
    why cant you just be with me

    Ur smile makes me fall,
    on my knees against the wall
    open arms is what i see
    why cant you just be with me

    your secret was a lie,
    i really thought you loved this guy

    last night was such a bluff
    i love u just not enough ?
    your confused , well so am i,
    i really thought you loved this guy

    everytime i look at you,
    i think of what we used to do,
    all the things you said for fun,
    like being the father of your son,

    well things have changed and so have i
    i really want to be that guy
     
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    atmaestro said:

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    Nice poem. Who says iambic pentameter is dead?
    Them that can, do; them that can't... memorize Artist and Title
     
  3. lyricsfromtheheart's Avatar

    lyricsfromtheheart said:

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    I like it alot. Hey at least you can rhyme i cant rhyme worth crap
     
  4. music fanatic's Avatar

    music fanatic said:

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    That's awesome. Truely, awesome.
    Heaven won't take me and Hell's afraid I'll take over
     
  5. mrtsligo said:

    Default this is one of my pages on bebo

     

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