another song, no title

ok here's this song I wrote, so coment please and tell me what you think, I'll accept any changes you can make if you want, oh and it hasn't got a title so you know if you want and come up with some good one I'll be grated thnxs !! there's a ? IN ONE PART Coz I don't know what would fit in ther following the rhyme and that makes any sense so :/ (just in case it has to rhyme with around ) ok now the song

now it's called "final cut"


Fame and eminence walked by her side,
Signs of prominence and recognition ,(surrounded her)
Infamy and shame, she`d never met them
But her life was always state of sorrow
She`d have to fake it all the time.

Her teenage years have been snatched away,
This is but an early prestige condition,
Where this girl have been filled with media chems
Filming at one day parties on the morrow
This bussines is like organizad crime.

After all, that's not what she's about
No walls stop rumours from going around
Gossiping things day in day out
Let's leave the limelight
That's tearing me down
Runaway somewhere I can't be found
Fame is infamous there is no doubt

It's very good, but I'm not liking the last verse that much, how about:
After all, that's not what she's about
No walls stop rumours from going around
Gossiping things day in day out
Let's leave the limelight
That's tearing me down
Runaway somewhere I can't be found
Fame is infamous there is no doubt

:O brilliant thank you so much!!

Very nice. Very um, cool. Keep it up.

thanks

You're totally welcome. The second verse is really good.

I'm gonna tittle this "final cut", coz the idea to write a song about this was given by one book from David Belbin called like that, tell me if it's not a good title for this song ok? thnks

Yeah, I think it'd fit very nicely. it's a really good song and the name would make it very appealing.

ok thanks ^^

I'm having a lot of problems in putting music to this and giving the lyrics a rythm
so if someone can tell me were can I learn to do this or directly telling me how to I'd apreciate it a lot, so thnx