~Entreaty for the Remorseless~

This is my first attempt at writing song lyrics, therefore please be kind (yet constructive criticism is always appreciated)!
As regards the music, think of something like Visions of Atlantis, Bloodflowerz, Blind Guardian or Nightwish (my inspirations for this one).


~Entreaty for the Remorseless~

You won't be able to fly when I'm falling
Laugh when I'm crying
Live when I'm dying...

So don’t...leave me behind
behind the walls of my mind I am hiding
Don’t...leave me alone
alone in the darkness my time I am biding

Don’t...leave me tonight
tonight I will spread my wings for the flight
Don’t...leave me like this
this time you will face my power and might

You won't be able to stand when I'm kneeling
Breathe when I'm choking
Love then I'm loathing...

So don’t...leave me with him
him I would kill in no time to break free
Don’t...leave me down here
here I would die after all can’t you see?

Don’t...leave me ever
ever from now I will not be affected
Don’t...leave me, my love
love, even the strongest one, withers neglected

Awesome. Good stuff.

Well, thank you, I tried my best