Sin

Hi, please tell me what you think of these lyrics, I like all music but metal is king.
Im currently studying game design and development and I use music to help me with inspiration, weird or not It works for me so I decided to write my thoughts in the form of lyrics. (First draft)

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I made a promise, you broke yours
You've left me here, and here I stand
Loss of life, I don’t understand
Why you left, my bodies numb
Here I stand, keeping my promise
I’ll be strong, not one tear
For this is life, the life u lived
The life you gave,
Here i stand,
Ever brave,
Your blood,
Our bond,
Your son

This day, this place, this moment, i come
with wings of lightning, drawing nearer, faster, stronger
he is the one, her son, we will be one, until it's time, to stand alone, against the evil that will be known
you alone will decide our fate, this risk i take, that you wont brake this world apart, like in the past
your kin


You've got something to give, i'l show you the way, we'll see what it is
Right or wrong, our only hope, to free the soul, so long ago, we fought to live
You've got something to give, i'l show you the way, we'll see what it is,
All i can say is that things will change, for better or worse, the sin within


You've shown me, deep within myself, something I always knew I had, although now I realise what it is
I made a mistake, your promise is kept, that blood you spilt, was to protect, I won’t forget
My promise still stands until the end, I’ll see it done, not just for you, this world I’ll hold, in my arms
I’m told all I am is sin, but you will see, my soul is free, not tied by chains of the past


I've got something to give, you can't take it away, you'll see what it is
I won’t hide, we shall collide, the day will come, I will not run, I’ll see you undone
I've got something to give, you can't take it away, you'll see what it is,
I don't care what you say, I know what it is, I've been holding it in, but now it's time, it's about to begin.


How can this be, born from sin, your kin not shown, something different, your will your own,
This bond you keep has changed your fate, now i know this chance i took, not in vain, a man born with power free from shame
Now it’s time, for you alone to stand, sword of the soul in your hand,
This foe you face knows no mercy, sin incarnate his wrath will shake you mind and soul,
Blood will flow, memories kept like a scar will burn anew, and all I ask is that you keep your humanity intact


I've got something to give, il blow you away, your sin will run like blood from your skin
You'd better run, you cannot hide, i am the one, this bond I keep, will see you undone
I've got something to give, you can't take it away, you'll see what it is
I won’t hide, we shall collide, the day will come, you can’t run, I’ll see you undone
I've got something to give, you can't take it away, you'll see what it is
I don't care what you say, I know what it is, I've been holding it in, but now it's time, it's about to begin


Here I stand,
Ever brave,
Your blood,
My bond,
You’re done.

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Thanks.

Not bad lyrics there

thanks