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Last edited by zoniq; 02-23-2009 at 01:16 AM.
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you did a nice job there
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thank you very much my friend..!
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your welcome
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The rhyming in the verses sound bit corny but otherwise it's ok.
* Difference of opinion is not argument, only difference.
* Just because you don't like something, doesn't make it sh*t
* You are all individual, just like everyone else. -
i have completed it now is this better or its too much?
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rise from these lies like a bolt through the skies
feeling numb from the crumb of this full poisoned plum
dont you fall, dont you crawl rise in heaven hear your call
silence you hear nobody`s here stop feeling lonely, stop your fear* Difference of opinion is not argument, only difference.
* Just because you don't like something, doesn't make it sh*t
* You are all individual, just like everyone else. -
accually its like this..
rise, from these lies, like a bolt through the skies
feeling numb, from the crumb, of this full poisoned plum
dont you fall, dont you crawl, rise in heaven hear your call
silence you hear, nobody`s here, stop feeling lonely, stop your fear
in every rhyme its a little pause so it goes perfectly with a song.. -
I had a good idea how the song went and I still feel the same way.
If it went "rise... from these lies... like a bolt... from the skies"
it'd scan better than no pause between bolt and "from the"* Difference of opinion is not argument, only difference.
* Just because you don't like something, doesn't make it sh*t
* You are all individual, just like everyone else. -
hmm.. this is also a great idea i will remake and see which is better..thanx for the advice worrier..
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Call me Luke, I'm getting fed up of this name now.
* Difference of opinion is not argument, only difference.
* Just because you don't like something, doesn't make it sh*t
* You are all individual, just like everyone else.