Hi. My name is Paweł. I'm from Poland. I am a guitarist in my band. At start sorry for my english Lately I Have bad moments in my life. When I was in work I wrote a lyrics to song about my situation, about love. Because nothing last forever So here it is. If you can, please give me some suggestions

„IMMORTAL ROSE”

Have you ever think about immortal?
About the seed, which plant grows forever.

This is the moment, when memories to rise,
Grow inside my head.
I remember everything, every moment with her.
I remember seed, in the middle of my hand.
I remember ground, fertile valley, full of love.
I promised myself to look after my dreams.
The Immortal Rose’s life turn over a new leaf.

That day was sunny and exciting.
I remember this like a yesterday, Me and mine Rose.
Only her and I, ay our promised land.
Time and world stopped, eternity was ours.
Then I look into her eyes
And I saw a dark clouds, on the blue sky.

The Immortal Rose is dying
When night into my arms.
Like a snowflake behind the glass.
The Immortal Rose is dying.
When day into my head.
Like a fallen leaf while the strongest wind.
The Immortal Rose is dying.