I'm new at this lyric writing and looking for honest no sugar coated opinions

verse

Gentle on my mind
doin' my time
I'm ragged but I'm right
Im living life in Johnny's eye's

course

In my life I'd walk the line
living life in Johnny's eye's
in my life Id cry cry cry
living life in Johnny's eye's

verse

A legend in my time
so lonesome I could cry
if you can read my mind
Im living life in Johnny's eye's

course

In my life I'd walk the line
living life in Johnny's eye's
In my life I'd cry cry cry
living life in Johnny's eye's

(bridge?)

Don't think twice it's all right
living life in Johnny's eyes
goodbye little darlin goodbye
I'm living life in Johnny's eye's

goodbye littlle darlin goodbye
I'm living life in Johnny's eye's

Copyright 2009

more cliches a slight improvement but still rubbish-Don't think twice it's all right-cliche-stolen from johhny cash

This song is meant to be a tribute to Johnny Cash. There are 11 Johnny Cash song titles in this song. Some titles are repeated.

ah, that's good. I might try making a song out of song titles. Not Johnny Cash though...

so its a list then basically

I like it
when I was reading it I suddenly knew this was a tribute to johnny cash
it's clear and straight
however, it might stand in the way of your personal input
but I'm sure that not all of your songs are based on titles and you'll make some beautiful personal ones too
keep at it