Nothing At All

Verse 1
You don't know what you do to a man
When he's left with nothing at all
A mistake I made, that I'm trying to change
Has made me the man that I am today
Heartless lies, with the thought of goodbye
I never knew the reason why you cried
Night seems to come so easily
When you leave me here, dying endlessly

Chorus
Just tell me that you love me
And I'll let you know the same
At night I keep calling out your name
Don't you know the feelings I have inside, won't fade
But without you I'm nothing at all
I'm nothing at all..

Verse 2
My heart's on the floor and now you can see me bleed
I'm hurting inside cause I know in my heart, that you're all I'll ever need
But you put up a front
Like I'm something you want
Then you take it all back in stride
I just want you to stay
But then you turn and walk away
I just want to make things right

Chorus
Just tell me that you love me
And I'll let you know the same
At night I keep calling out your name
Don't you know the feelings I have inside, won't fade
But without you I'm nothing at all
I'm nothing at all

Bridge
Don't you know that I love the way
That you look at me in the eyes
All my life I've been searching for you
And now I never want to let you go

Chorus- 2x
Just tell me that you love me
And I'll let you know the same
At night I keep calling out your name
Don't you know the feelings I have inside, won't fade
But without you I'm nothing at all
I'm nothing at all...

Really great lyrics. The only thing I see that you may think about changing is the last 2 lines in verse 2

Instead of

* But then you turn and walk away
* I just want to make things right

switch out the lines

* I just want to make things right
* But then you turn and walk away

It seems to flow better this way with the rhyme pattern

Great writing, keep up the good work

Thanks for the input!! That does sound like a good idea! I'm going to make that change...

Or i could maybe say..

I just want you to stay
But then you turn and walk away
I'm just tryin to make things right


How does that sound?

Then you take it all back in *stride*
I just want you to *stay*
But then you turn and walk *away*
I just want to make things *right*

These last four words in each line is your rhyme pattern the timing is off.

Something else you may want to work with. Compare verse 2 with verse 1 .
allow verse 1 to be your guide to working with verse 2.

Instead of

My heart's on the floor and now you can see me bleed
I'm hurting inside cause I know in my heart, that you're all I'll ever need
But you put up a front
Like I'm something you want
Then you take it all back in stride
I just want you to stay
But then you turn and walk away
I just want to make things right

change to

I know in my heart
that you're all I'll ever need
But you put up a front
Like I'm something you want
Then you take it all back in stride
I just want you to stay
I just want to make things right
but then you turn and walk away

Just some ideas :-) keep writing

like half the songs on here have something about bleeding.... Songwriting- dangerous career no. 7 in between lion wrestling and being a deep sea electrician

just lightening up the mood....