Fluorescent

Hello, new member.

Figured I might as well post a song I wrote to be critiqued, hope you all enjoy.

disconnected at the seams
we're a happy little story
caught somewhere in between

and the people here are askin
all the questions to what happened

will you fare through the shadows
or be hung from the gallows

and I wont dissemble
to cover my marks
the red on your fingers
to cover your scars

and the shades have all changed
from anemic to fluorescent
your moon has fallen
from a queen to a crescent

now your face has no pull
and your body cant harbor
my heart

and i wont dissemble
to cover my marks
the red on your fingers
to cover your scars

good but it isn't long enough for an actual song.

but yeah still good =)