hey can you rate please

hey first time on here been writing lyricy things for a long time but never showed anyone outside of my girlfriend who is obliged to like them lol so any comments welcome its not like you'll be crushing me or my confidence lol!

how do they get right there,
these images words that are not mine.
stray thoughts out of control,
ending in tears as the process ends
the process comes to an end.

there are things we dont understand
things that will just be labelled and
given as much of the meds they need
to sedate them to kill their apathy.

failing not by choice but through their eyes
they cant see just how well i have done
to wake up in the morning to jump out of bed
but they are starting to think its all in my head
i can see what your thinking im not being paranoid
i know what your saying when im not around
you just dont believe when i say
i suffer from voices images that arent mine!

shut down, drink up, stay inside, fall out
shut down, drink up, stay inside, fall out
close down **** up, left outside, limp out

limp out of this race, things never get better
pull over let everyone through whilst thinking
would the ending be better if it were cut short
would the ending be better if it were to die tonight

there are things we dont understand
things that will just be labelled and
given as much of the meds they need
to sedate them to kill all their apathy
the ending may just be tonight!!

well thats the first one so i will wait for any comments on this one before i post any more

pretty good song, stuck to the subject and u made it make sense, im pretty sure the next u post will b longer tho rite? anyway, length doesn't mayyer this was good, culd u review some of my posts tho? I really need to kno how my songs are

hey thanks for the reply. that seems to be about the length of my lyrics but i suppose i havent included what ones would be repeated. yep definitely will have a look at some of yours