Are there any mistakes in my lyrics?

Thread: Are there any mistakes in my lyrics?

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  1. Ilya said:

    Default Are there any mistakes in my lyrics?

    Lap Dog



    I am the lap-dog
    I am the humble puppet.
    I’m serving to the rich hog
    I’m nothing more than a clever bullet.

    I am the Cerberus,
    I am the shackled demon.
    Why not to break loose
    Just to unleash my freedom?

    What is left, shall we go?
    Set the world on fire.
    The Cradles are gonna fall,
    Shall we satisfy desire?

    Nothing left, shall we go?
    Set the world on fire.
    The Cradles are gonna fall,
    Shall we satisfy desire?

    I was the lap-dog
    I was the humble puppet.
    Until I’ve judged this Word
    And executed genocide.

    I am the Cerberus,
    I am the bloody demon.
    Why not to break loose
    Just unleash my freedom?

    What is left, shall we go?
    Set the world on fire.
    The Cradles are gonna fall,
    Shall we satisfy desire?

    Nothing left, shall we go?
    Set the world on fire.
    The Cradles are gonna fall,
    Shall we satisfy desire?

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    Androgyny



    Verse 1
    Time is passing by
    Growing flames inside,
    Our shells are merging into single stream of light.

    Passion’s in the air,
    We are much aware
    That the pleasure is the poison, but nobody cares.

    Chorus
    Shift my mind and make me crazy,
    Nothing else is matter now
    Make our pleasure everlasting
    What were two’s becoming one.

    Verse 2
    Time is passing by
    Growing flames inside,
    Our shells are merging into single stream of light.

    Power to create
    Is clean and innocent
    But the path of us is thorny, any rain is wet.

    Chorus
    Shift my mind and make me crazy,
    Nothing else is matter now
    Make our pleasure everlasting
    What were two’s becoming one.

    Shift my mind and make me crazy,
    Nothing else is matter now
    Make our pleasure everlasting
    What were two’s becoming one.

    Bridge

    Androgyny – arise!

    Chorus and Coda

    Shift my mind and make me crazy,
    Nothing else is matter now
    Make our pleasure everlasting
    What were two’s becoming one.

    Shift my mind and make me crazy,
    Nothing else is matter now
    Make our pleasure everlasting
    What were two’s becoming one.

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    In Vain



    Savage drilling machine
    Is trepanning my scull,
    Pest's already inside.

    Thoughts are getting’ so keen,
    When I’m starting to mull,
    They are blowing my mind.

    I hear desolate words,
    Someone’s trying to scream,
    I turn music aloud.

    Enough
    I will shut up this voice,
    I am going to drink
    This will settle my mind.

    I cannot sing these notes,
    So I will scream.
    Why don’t you hear my words
    Is it a sin?

    [CHORUS]
    I’m your forgotten soul,
    I’ve been locked inside the dreadful jail.
    You are refusing me,
    You know, you're hurting me,
    Nevertheless, my voice in vain.
    I’m your forbidden soul,
    I’ve been trapped inside... you are my jail.
    You are refusing me,
    You know, you're killing me,
    Nevertheless, we are in vain.

    Savage drilling machine
    Is trepanning my scull,
    Pest's is already inside.

    Any thoughts are so keen,
    When I’m starting to mull,
    They are blowing my mind.

    Drink a bottle ore more,
    Smoke and having a sex
    Now I’m feeling ok.

    I don’t hear no more words,
    Voices gone for their rest
    After all, I'm still sane.

    I cannot sing these notes,
    So I will scream.
    Why don’t you hear my words
    Is it a sin?


    [CHORUS] 3x

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    I believe i need some constructive criticism from the native speakers. Thank you in advance!
     

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