No title as yet...feedback/critique much appreciated

This is very much a work in progress and I'd really appreciate some feedback to help me decide what to keep in this and what to take out. Feedback on any aspect of the song is appreciated since this is only my second ever attempt at writing lyrics.

Verse 1:

Dark clouds fill the air as the winds of doubt howl around me
Heavens in tears I feel my fears form a snare around my ankles
Suddenly a break in the clouds
Rays of light push back the shroud
The light is yours and it shines brightly

Verse 2:

The shackles freed I take a step, head forwards down the road
I slowly find my stride as we travel through this landscape
All the while appreciating the grandeur of this new terrain

--------- The above I'm in two minds about, not sure I like these verses -----------

Chorus:

Through doubt and fear you've walked beside me
Through growth and change you've held my hand
I know I'll always have the presence of you who guides me, who inspires me
I will always have my truest freind
I will always have my Frankie

Verse 3:

In the dark we sit and talk while these words of ours sound in the air
Time passes on its way, while leaving us behind
I take a look at my reflection
On its face I see the cracks and through these cracks I see the light
This light is mine and it shines brightly

--- Chorus ---

In this place there are two lights
Both help to push back the night
When one flickers the other heeds
Giving help in time of need
We are these lights and we shine brightly!

--- Chorus ---

The chorus and lead up to the final chorus I'm happy with and would appreciate your opinions on, the third verse I like but I would also appreciate some constructive feedback on this too.
I'm writing this song about/for a friend, its about the strong bond between us.

how about this for the first verse:
Dark clouds fill the air as the winds of doubt howl around me
Heavens in tears as my fears entangle me
A ray of light pushes through the cloud
A light shining bright in the crowd
You’re my light and you shine

here's another bit you could add somewhere:
You guide me as we run through the shadows of the night
You show me the way so I feel alright