first time here. please read some lyrics i wrote and tell me what you think :)

just tell me what you think. i'd like an opinion;;;


twenty four minutes past midnight,
tear stained and full of spite,
should be preparing for the pressure of tomorrow,
i should really stop wasting my nights in sorrow,

if you could just see,
what you're doing to me
woahhh woahh.

the only thing keeping me going,
is knowing,
things can only get better than this.
cos when you're young,
everything seems like the end of the world,
but the truth is,
its just the beginning.
but i'm never winning.

thirty one minutes past midnight,
glaring, staring, at the starlight,
thinking why is she the one?
we have so much fun

but its to late for you and your jokes,
cos i was wrong,
about our song,
been made for us
woahh woahh

the only thing keeping me going,
is knowing,
things can only get better than this.
cos when you're young,
everything seems like the end of the world,
but the truth is,
its just the beginning.
but i'm never winning.

fourty three minutes past midnight,
cool and calm but ready to fight,

but now i'm dreaming about the first time i saw you,
perfect blonde hair bleached with sunlight its true,
and your stylish fashion,
was my passion.
checking you out,
flutter and pout,
you're not perfection,
but my affection,
suits you amazingly.

the only thing keeping me going,
is knowing,
things can only get better than this.
cos when you're young,
everything seems like the end of the world,
but the truth is,
its just the beginning.
but baby, baby i'm winning.

I really like the chorus to this song, especially the one at the end.