Insane Rap. Needs feedback.

Thread: Insane Rap. Needs feedback.

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  1. 020Jeffs said:

    Exclamation Insane Rap. Needs feedback.

    I am the catalytic critic the cynic of idyllic minutes
    This world is imperfect and so is everything in it.
    The evil needle, injecting pain into every minute
    Every single massacre 3 guesses who did it.
    I am the logical, of the impossible uncrossable
    The pain of abortion and a billion hospitals
    Collected, into my mind infected
    Not even the best can asses the wreckage.
    By convention, I am your infinite dimension
    By the depths of genius I am the greatest invention
    It’s not about attacking or tracking nobody’s slacking
    I’m a turbulent disturbance, I’m unpacking I’m hatching
    I’m changing, the amazing that was waiting escaping
    I’m taking the scrapings of the world that is shaking
    I’m invisible, I’m the invincible principle
    The Psychological and medical Incredible Miracle
    A million civilians fearing every syllable
    The terrible parable killing all that is killable
    And all else that isn’t is awaiting my visit
    Where ill deploy and destroy and nothing I create will miss it.
    I’m the scariest piece of the hairiest beast
    Tearing my leash and preparing to feast.
    Filthiest claws ready to rip you to shreds
    Injecting infecting and severing heads
    The architect of every sick shipwreck
    The blade that played in every severing neck
    There’s no benevolent text, no words that protect
    Just chronicles of horrible sent direct to infect.
    Hell bent this, and now I’m relentless
    Years of pain have been sent to invent this.
    Witness the Convulsions of a thousand explosions
    As I explode and time ruptures from my chemical potions
    All the supersonic stars couldn’t combine to break me
    I am the twisted turmoil has compiled to make me
    I am the Richter scale and nothing can shake me
    This is the world that I hate and I hope that it hates me
    Stand back, as I expand and contract
    Multiple disorders and ideas react
    There’s no stopping me from properly dropping atomically
    I’m maniacally diabolical shockingly and impossibly
    I have awoken from all that is evil and broken
    I am choking the world and as its people have spoken
    I challenge thee to banish me to a very distant galaxy
    I am fear hate and violence you can’t stop this world from having me
    The terrorists and dictators are the people here that channel me
    I will strike down with upon those who utilise me happily
  2. 020Jeffs said:

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    Thanks for the compliment but I'm not satanic, and I don't like satanic lyrics.
  3. 020Jeffs said:

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    You shouldn't harbour a theme you don't believe in.
  4. 020Jeffs said:

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    I'm not being stuck up. I'm just sharing an opinion. Yes I believe everything I write (metaphorically speaking), its not about just making words rhyme, rap is a medium and the style you rap in is another lyric that shares the way you feel. Rap is an art, and flow, rhythm and tone are comparable to brush strokes, palette and texture in visual art.

    I'm not criticising what you believe in, but when you say that Satanism is just a theme, I find it hard to take your lyrics seriously because you don't believe in the theme of your lyrics, therefore they cannot be perceived as sincere.