Choke

This is the first song i've written and it could use a lot of help. It's pretty much just a bunch of chunks of words. But it's about making a mistake with someone because you want to believe they're honest. I want it to be a piano song If you have any ideas on how to fix it up, tell me please

Those eyes, that grin
Everything about you, should be a sin
Your sweet talk made me melt
Your lies were perfect; undeniable

No matter how many times I fell
how many times I broke
I kept thinking, maybe it’ll be different
Maybe I’m good enough

But I’m not.

Looking back, I meant nothing
Looking back, I was stupid
Looking back, I played pretend,
hoping it would never end
But it won’t happen again
I’m not that girl anymore, and I hope you
Choke.

Well I don’t blame you
Not for wasting my time
Or even for feeding me your lies
I should’ve known, you’re not mine

This regret is torture
Can I take it back?
Can I please, take it back?
It’s not fair
I breakdown thinking of you
I hate you

Looking back, I meant nothing
Looking back, I was stupid
Looking back, I played pretend,
hoping it would never end
But it won’t happen again
I’m not that girl anymore, and I hope you
Choke.

Sitting at home,
Waiting by the phone
It never rang

That voice in the back of my head
She was pretty smart
She knew all along
I’d never belong in your heart

Broken promises
Careless mistakes
False hope
I hope you choke.
Oh, i hope you choke.

Amazing! I can relate to this so much!

leave it this way
it's awesome

I absolutely agree, don't touch it!

This song has quite a strong emotion, and made me think of some of the things that have happened lately in my life. Great job!