Beyond Redemption (Grunge)

BEYOND REDEMPTION (Grunge) ****PLEASE COMMENT, TY****
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Inwardly depressed, with unknown conditions
Someones ill cancer, black death conscriptions
Feels so alone but everyones herein
Family's love, feels so warm with tears

Departed dreams, with sweaty cold fears
Governments bullshit, well who really cares
Agenda's on hand, with new stocks and shares
Death will be with you, your Beyond Redemption

Beyond Redemption
Lives play out
Beyond Redemption
Government lies
Beyond Redemption
Lights so dim
Beyond Redemption
Our time is up!

No understanding, within my sights
Light is much brighter, with linear delights
Fighting much higher, with clear coagulation
Above and beyond, fully tainted solutions

Purely divined, with full instagations
Scared but be brave, we make no small intentions
Will powers tough, with such crumbling subnations
Watch out world, your Beyond Redemption.

Beyond Redemption
Lives play out
Beyond Redemption
Government lies
Beyond Redemption
Lights so dim
Beyond Redemption
Your time is up!

Beyond Redemption
Lives play out
Beyond Redemption
Government lies
Beyond Redemption
Lights so dim
Beyond Redemption
Their time is up!


Proactive solutions, with negative intentions
All Fighting strong, beyond all expectations
Our Strength is up, but Our morales in damnation
Undeadly crawls, we're Beyond Redemption.

Beyond Redemption
Lives play out
Beyond Redemption
Government lies
Beyond Redemption
Lights so dim
Beyond Redemption
My time is up!

i like most of it just not how many times you rhyme out with out
oh and in the chorus you could say lives play out instead of die because... well i dont really know how to explain it but there you go

Originally Posted by Carpe dium

i like most of it just not how many times you rhyme out with out
oh and in the chorus you could say lives play out instead of die because... well i dont really know how to explain it but there you go

So , How does it look now? Ty for your comment.

thats actually really good i like it heaps good job bro

are you like in a legit band becuase my cousin is in a band and sings well screams like this and i can forward this to him in an email and he can edit it for you and all that and give you some tips if you wanna.
not that im saying its bad because its not its good actually (:
jsut helping out

Originally Posted by Cheerblondie231

are you like in a legit band becuase my cousin is in a band and sings well screams like this and i can forward this to him in an email and he can edit it for you and all that and give you some tips if you wanna.
not that im saying its bad because its not its good actually (:
jsut helping out

Actually Im not in a band. I was just fooling around when I noticed I was actually going somewhere with these lyrics.
You can send them to your cousin If you want. Tell him If he wants to use the lyrics, to be my guest. Just to let me know how it goes and his comments.

Thank you.

Paulb1979@Hotmail.com

lukas your commenting on the wrong thread (sorry about him)

damnn im an idiot sorry guys