Heres a song i wrote that ive been wanting to show. Tell me what you think.

-Final Chance (Last day in hell) By Louis Branfield


VERSE 1
Everything is clear to me
Now that the worlds come to an end
Morals written across the walls
This is the only one ill sen
*send
We were punished for all our sins
Now mankind is dead
(drum beat kicks in)
But if theres no hope
Take my hand
You and i
Will have this final dance.
END OF VERSE

CHORUS
Cus girl ive always loved you
Now were going to die
Lets just die together
As we look upon the burning sky
Take my hand
And hold it tight
Here comes the storm
Ill be your comfort
Ill be your warmth
END OF CHORUS

VERSE 2
All i see is fire
As i walk along the street
Its hard to know the end is near
For everyone i meet
Always expected help
Now im left alone
Its hard to beleive that life is dead
Now im sitting here on my own
People pressed against the walls
Heads hung in shame
They all gave up on love
They have no-one to blame
Worlds collpasing all around me
Every step i make
Tears coming to my eyes
Now that my souls awake
The girl i love
Has left my life
Im sitting at the door
Maybe one day
She'll return
Cus i cant bear it anymore
Never felt so lonely
(music stops) Never felt so insecure(huge rock beat kicks in)
END OF VERSE


CHORUS
Cus girl ive always loved you
Now were going to die
Lets just die together
As we look upon the burning sky
Take my hand
And hold it tight
Here comes the storm
Ill be your comfort
Ill be your warmth
END OF CHORUS

(huge rock beat makes an instrumental)
(instrumental fades into a quiet dark tune)
As i look into your face
We stand here ready to die
I stayed true till the end of the world
Now we finally see eye to eye
The emotion could have killed me
But i guess i held it out
All i can do is sit back
As the human race. SCREAM AND SHOUT
The messages on the walls
Tell me im the one at fault
Seeing you again
My heartbeat came to a halt
We shall have this dance
As the twisted world bends
We stare into each others eyes
And that is how it ends
Heaven has become hell
And were just going further in
My mind still dwells on us
And what we could have been
(Chorus repeats then song ends)


If any1 could make a backing track i would be grateful