please, constructive criticism only. thank you

i do what i do without committing an offense. b!tches addicted to my d!ck like its a dependence. surrounded by lyrical barbwire fence, theres no leaving unless you wanna bleed to death.rapping to get respect, ill take everything til you have nothing left. run up to me and get stole like a theft. please, i get more cheese in these streets, ill paint you like a masterpiece. i eat so many rappers like its a feast. when it comes to sick im the mother f.cking disease. your done, got it kapeesh.

Constructive criticism, ok.

It's not because your last words rhyme, that your rap is good. Rapping is all about playing with words until u find the right combination.

Also your rap has no structure at all, how are you even going to try to spit this on a beat ?

Another thing, on this site everything gets censured, so each time this ***** appears, I have to guess what word you've used.

i edited it and all these dont go into one rap. each one is a different verse. but thank you. youtube tends to **** on me when i post stuff like this on instrumental beats lol

A whole lot better ! Atleast I understand what you're saying now. So I tried to make something different out of your first verse, you'll see that it flows a lot easier.


I'mma hit it hard on this shxt
Spit it as if my lyric was a dxck
Bxtch, I would kill this
Can u feel the realness ?
Infect haters with pellagra
I get major like viagra
On my grind anytime, U can call me a skater
My rhymes so fly, I get rid of them debaters
I'm undefeated with u haters
Y'all get beaten like the Raiders
Oh I will bring it like I'm platinum
Kill as if my skills are to a magnum

sounds amazing actually but im looking for a flow like lil waynes a little bit.

lots of metaphors and other stuff. pretty much what people like these days.. i started rapping like him or what not and everything i posted got the most thumbs up.

so in other words, popular by demand is what im looking for. which brings in the money.

correct if im wrong. thank you

I rap because I love to write and rap and because I want to create my own style, not because I'm planning on making big money. There's only one Lil' Wayne song that I like, and it's Pxssy Monster.
I'm more of an oldskool fan, I don't even listen to new artists just because hiphop is not what it used to be.
But heeyy, if u wanna do it Lil' Wayne style, go ahead, there's indeed a lot of people that do like him and his style, success !